Drehle's point is that if students don't participate in some sort of summer enrichment program they will lose about a month of what they learned in school.

The author of the students essay fully disagrees with Drehle's view. He makes valid points that supports Drehle's point but also discredits Drehle's argument toward a specific group of children in only certain parts of city's.

I think that his claims are true to an extent.He is right when he says that most kids now wouldn't participate in enrichment programs due to the excessive technology & he's also right when he says that we should attend these programs for the under privileged kids to keep up with the more privileged kids.

The author has a lot of faith in his argument. He states that not all blame can be on the "summer slide," but the teachers or student need to take credit for it as well. 


I personally liked this essay. This essay gave me a new perspective of the original article. I would give this essay an A just like Victors. 

How does this essay compare to Victor's essay? 

Prima&Michael [topic sentence paragraph] 1-26-11

During the Iraqi election in 2005, voters thumbs were stamped purple as evidence that they had cast their vote.
Having your thumb stamped purple was a symbol of democracy, even woman in Iraq were able to show off their purple thumbs.




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Prima&Michael [topic sentence paragraph]

Consider the contradictions: It was the first medicine ever designed to be taken regularly by people who were not sick. Its main inventor was a conservative Catholic who was looking for a treatment for infertility and instead found a guarantee of it. It was blamed for unleashing the sexual revolution among suddenly swinging singles, despite the fact that throughout the 1960s, women usually had to be married to get it. Its supporters hoped it would strengthen marriage by easing the strain of unwanted children; its critics still charge that the Pill gave rise to promiscuity, adultery and the breakdown of the family. In 1999 the Economist named it the most important scientific advance of the 20th century, but Gloria Steinem, one of the era's most influential feminists, calls its impact "overrated." One of the world's largest studies of the Pill — 46,000 women followed for nearly 40 years — was released this March. It found that women who take the Pill are less likely to die prematurely from any cause, including cancer and heart disease, yet many women still question whether the health risks outweigh the benefits



By Time Magazine




We believe that our topic sentence leads the way for the rest of the paragraph because every sentence that follows the first lists contradictions.